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time (3rd draft) (Haiku) by Adriaan

Goldfish contemplate raindrops rippling the surface Ice ends disturbance

Ranger 6-Feb-06/9:34 AM
Better, although I feel it's still lacking something. Haikus are really tough to get right; I've never yet written one that I've been happy with. Hopefully the more experienced poets here will be of more use than me, because the idea behind this is really quite good.




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