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time (3rd draft) (Haiku) by Adriaan

Goldfish contemplate raindrops rippling the surface Ice ends disturbance

Adriaan 6-Feb-06/9:26 AM
Does similie count for anything? I've changed the opening line to a metaphor - please comment.




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