Ranger6 Feb 2006

zodiac, that was very diplomatic of you, I'm highly impressed! Angelica, you obviously have some poetic ability; take note of what zodiac's said here, be original and creative. If I've seen it before, I'll get bored of it quickly whereas if it makes me stop and think then I'm more likely to take it in.
On a more specific note, the rhythm here is a little awkward in places, 'distant' (line 18) could be replaced, etc. etc. etc.
As z says, welcome to the ranker!