Replying to a comment on:

Racial Hate (Free verse) by Glasseyez

Black or white and red all over Blood is red and knows no color Skin black or white or yellow, brown This liquid always finds the ground Race is only skin deep so why is it that we Use it to judge each and every person we meet Blood has one color and our hearts do too That is red only changing when we are dead In which we return from the dust we came No man is different we are all the same….. Stop using race to fuel your rage.

LilMsLadyPoet 2-Feb-06/7:47 PM
I like that you want to speak about this, and applaud your effort to do so...that being said...the first four lines made me think you were going to go someplace interesting with this piece...but then it got messy and didn't say anything else new or well-said. I'd say goback to the drawingtable with the first four lines in front of you...and go from there, again.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001