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A Loud Room (Free verse) by MacFrantic

The tube bursts sounds like voices and revelry of the mundane. My temples ache for pleasant dissociation, and for the cold glow. I crumble; dissipate in an overwhelming. There is sound and there is silence, and I dare not speak to disturb them both. My view from near is dots, dancing hues: a puzzle of light. Television reflections bounce and turn. Laughter pulls my posture forward to a hunch, while my eyes drown in the shadows of a midnight. I'm sure to wake to silence, And the screen does beg to see my nod complete.

LilMsLadyPoet 2-Feb-06/7:42 PM
My fav:
"I crumble;
dissipate in an overwhelming.
There is sound and there is silence,
and I dare not speak
to disturb them both."
Awesome, awesome, awesome!...BTW, is that correct spelling of dissipate...it looks wrong...?...LOL
My least favorite:My view from near is dots
Anyway, I liked this.




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