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Les Imagistes (Other) by Nicholas Jones

We would call this peaceful and it is quiet compared to the noise of the urban morning and the tapping of the office workers. But still there are birds and human footsteps and background hiss of traffic like scratches on an old seven inch. The imagists were wrong, I think, you see Imagism is creating coherence by having an idea and purging all that does not fit. I argue instead for contradiction through mass inclusion encompass all we can and some of it will work: a poetics like a duck on a frozen lake confused that he can walk on water.

LilMsLadyPoet 2-Feb-06/9:24 AM
maybe : punctuation would make first stanza more clear?>
We would call this peaceful, and
it IS quiet, compared to the noise
of the urban morning and
the tapping of the office workers.

(never mind...it doesn't work...unless you went on to say something about the false perception of feeling peaceful.(But I am in no way at peace.)
at and 2nd stanza, it would need "so it isn't exactly quiet, either. at the end, to explain your 'but still'.
Do you think, or do I see? You are saying you think, so drop the 'you see' in 3rd stanza.
a poetics like a duck...> ? poet's, poetic's (A 'poet is' like...?)




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