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Generation Next, Fuck you(The Fake Out) (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

She hit it twice And said it that was nice So I lay in paradise Watching as she Called out orders With her twirling tongue She called up the reserves Saying the little bastards Got what they deserved Racing off into hi-way traffic With such fearless nerve Down a one way tunnel Toward foreign soil after dark Hoping to hit the right waters You see, You see, A sad set of swimmers Behind her drum's beat March, March, Come Forward, First man to the finish, Lair, Lair, Race on, faster, faster, Bang, Bang, Blast off the cannon Welcome, Welcome Lair, Lair Swim on, swim on, Close, close Here it comes Surprise, Surprise Lake of fire

LilMsLadyPoet 31-Jan-06/10:19 AM
Is this one of your sex poems, one of your war-commentary poems, or a drug poem? Or 'the ignorance and bliss of unknowing the young possess'?
"And said it that was nice"> wanna fix that? (that it?)(said it was nice?)(And said,"That was nice.")?




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