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midnight feast (Free verse) by pollywolly

creeping down the darkened road, fading light of the street lamps behind us, we giggle eyes darting nervously we run past the silent wood pausing for breath as the old manse house looms in the distance, a menacing glow emanating from a window announcing the closeness fear arising hands clasping for one another we tiptoe past through the creaking gates of the old cemetary where the midnight feast can begin

ALChemy 30-Jan-06/9:28 AM
I know what you're getting at. It's a horror technique designed to make the audience keep thinking about the movie after they go home and maybe hopefully have nightmares about it. But there's not a whole lot of stuff for your audience to take home yet. You still need more story. Right now what we've got is just a scary scene from the story.




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