ALChemy30 Jan 2006

Thanks E. Good points. I typed it on Word and basically only used its spell check so my laziness and bad spelling bit me in the ass. Your right, I probably could have come up with something better than the Santa line. The dream wife lines? Well, my father tends to think ahead of himself sometimes and it causes his sentences to be only obscurely connected. I couldn't resist mirroring this in the poem a little. This is what I meant:
"Run to your dream wife(the wife I imagined I'd have) who’s face as light glows through closed lids like stained glass, illuminating blood capillaries the color of fresh lava(while staring into the slightly translucent inside of my eyelids) and if you concentrate appears into your frontal lobe as vapor apparition.(Her face appears like a ghostly illusion projected by my mind while my eyes are closed). So it's connected but there's a lot of descriptive stuff stuffed between the connections. I do the same thing when I interupt my father's line “Are you sure you want mine, their so - old and used" with a memory of my childhood. Soul mate was just a play on Soles (which I misspelled the first time). So I screwed that one up for sure. "Prophet shoes" is because of the omen at the beginning where the shoes don't quite fit.
You've got an eye like an editor E. Thankya