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Generation Next, Fuck you(The Fake Out) (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

She hit it twice And said it that was nice So I lay in paradise Watching as she Called out orders With her twirling tongue She called up the reserves Saying the little bastards Got what they deserved Racing off into hi-way traffic With such fearless nerve Down a one way tunnel Toward foreign soil after dark Hoping to hit the right waters You see, You see, A sad set of swimmers Behind her drum's beat March, March, Come Forward, First man to the finish, Lair, Lair, Race on, faster, faster, Bang, Bang, Blast off the cannon Welcome, Welcome Lair, Lair Swim on, swim on, Close, close Here it comes Surprise, Surprise Lake of fire

Ranger 29-Jan-06/1:40 PM
This one's tricky to comment on; a lot of people have looked at it according to the hits counter, but I can only assume that they, like I, don't really know what to make of it. It feels like it's a good poem, but it's more than my tiny brain can get round at the moment. If you gave me an explanation, maybe that would help.




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