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The True Fate of Humpty Dumpty (Free verse) by Joe-joe

There is a sill hidden neatly behind a cherry bordered wall in the old abandoned publishing plant right next door to Stewart’s grocery store in a town once nourished by the railroad. On restful nights you can still hear the sound of a caboose running shotgun for a string of cars that vanish on the horizon. Strip the sandals from your feet and you’ll feel life in the ground beneath you. A life that inexplicably makes it’s way past the old rusted press and inkwells to a bookshelf where three blind mice sit lost atop a wall once reserved for a lad named Humpty Dumpty who for some reason has wandered astray and is now a permanent guest of the Queen.

Joe-joe 25-Jan-06/7:09 AM
Very constructive comments ecargo. You're absolutely right about the NR coming out of nowhere... I actually wrote the last 4 lines first while sitting at my desk this morning. Don't ask me why but the Humpty Dumpty and Three Blind Mice thing just popped into my mind...that's kind of how it is with most of what I write. Interesting image but I felt myself straining to fit it within the context of a story...another common occurrence with regard to my writing. Again, I appreciate your thoughtful suggestions. Joe




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