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A Sheep’s Wish (Free verse) by Dovina

Born under Aries, you can call me ewe Rams batter (I’m flattered) bruising brothers with butts to garner my favor I bleat for the black one roll eyes at the spotted then gloat as their heads collide all the harder If they knew what I wanted they’d give up the struggle build nests like the thrush then sing me their songs I’d tour the neighborhood test furnishing and fur hear scratching of ramhorn then choose me a mate But my suitors keep butting like blood-sucking fleas who plant killer germs in animals they need Why can’t these rams do their work in the day gather nuts like the squirrel nectar like bees And remember when they like this lamb at my side had good homes for retiring and swim there like salmon He could mate with me there rest finally in peace ignoring the common sheep who can do as they please

Dovina 23-Jan-06/9:00 PM
These are good observations and suggestions. I’ve made revisions based of some of them, though you don’t see them here. Thanks.

Your comments on poems by others have likewise seemed worthwhile. I see you’ve been commenting since 11/02, but your poems are few and recent. I am much newer here and can’t help wondering what username you went by then and what happened to the many poems you must have posted before this January. No answer is necessary, and I won’t keep bugging. It’s good have you around.




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