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Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) (Free verse) by ecargo

My tongue’s loose slide would soon let slip this truth, bruised blue, behind these sentinel teeth. We meet. Touch. Fuck. We seldom speak much more than surface gloss-- from niceties to wordless heat, we move. With your hand warm on my neck, I swallow words thick with promise, glistening like larva trapped in tissue webs, my palate ridged as a whale's. Words grow pallid as mushrooms in the echoless dark, slick with the sweat of caves. I want to devour you, a carnal glide, deep as a worm, down, down, in my rich earth.

god'swife 20-Jan-06/6:20 PM
I have a terminal case of writer's block. That, along with my horror at reading my previous comments was enough to keep me away.

When first I left, i'd check the site occasionally for anything worth reading, but we all know what a shot in the dark that is.

I haven't visited the site in about 10 months. How serendipitous. The poem is good. "Sentinel teeth" has a complexity of meaning and it's placed wonderfully between bruising & fucking. (Oh how our bodies do betray us)

It's an honest poem. I can feel it. It's human.
"Trapped in tissue webs" is sensual, that along with the following line is spot on. Anatomically accurate and emotional all at once.




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