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Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) (Free verse) by ecargo

My tongue’s loose slide would soon let slip this truth, bruised blue, behind these sentinel teeth. We meet. Touch. Fuck. We seldom speak much more than surface gloss-- from niceties to wordless heat, we move. With your hand warm on my neck, I swallow words thick with promise, glistening like larva trapped in tissue webs, my palate ridged as a whale's. Words grow pallid as mushrooms in the echoless dark, slick with the sweat of caves. I want to devour you, a carnal glide, deep as a worm, down, down, in my rich earth.

ALChemy 20-Jan-06/3:51 PM
"I've had eighteen straight whiskies, I think that's the record..." ~~ Dylan Thomas' last words. How could you not love a guy like that.
Yeah, I think many english teachers make a mistake in teaching free verse before conventional poetry simply because it's easier.
You must first learn to paint like Michelangelo before you can paint like Picasso.

You've got a great foundation to build off from.
I only wish you had a more comfortably addressable screen name.




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