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Best left unsaid (trust first instincts edit, w/thanks) (Free verse) by ecargo

My tongue’s loose slide would soon let slip this truth, bruised blue, behind these sentinel teeth. We meet. Touch. Fuck. We seldom speak much more than surface gloss-- from niceties to wordless heat, we move. With your hand warm on my neck, I swallow words thick with promise, glistening like larva trapped in tissue webs, my palate ridged as a whale's. Words grow pallid as mushrooms in the echoless dark, slick with the sweat of caves. I want to devour you, a carnal glide, deep as a worm, down, down, in my rich earth.

ALChemy 20-Jan-06/3:07 PM
Well I never! At least not from that end.
I'm not that happy with the layout though. Play with it for a while(pun-alert!) and see what comes out.

Like:

My tongue's
loose
slide
would soon
let slip this truth,
bruise-blue,
kept fast behind
these sentinal teeth.

We meet,
touch,
fuck;
we seldom speak much more
than surface gloss.
From niceties
to wordless heat
we move. Here
with your big
hand warm on my neck,
I swallow
words thick with promise,
glistening like larva
trapped in tissue webs,
a palate ridged as a whale's.
I'd consume you
whole, take you deep,
sliding
soft as a worm,
down
down
in a sudden
gasp.




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