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The Prayer Vendor (Free verse) by Enkidu

The corners hide him, standing there in absolution. He greets you with sincerity, and deil's smiles become his martyrs. There are craven deprecations from the callers, and daring, fellow-feeling prayers to ponder on, unresolved. Now, the mortal angels rend the sky to find him sitting on heavy weather; the vitiating veil. They curtail their graces. And the Vendor whiles away his wares to poorer folk who stand in queue: the drudge and the march, with little miracles to desire.

Dovina 12-Jan-06/6:01 PM
How does a smile become a martyr?
"craven deprications" Did you use a thesaurus for "cowardly blames"? Not that it matters, but simpler language goes down easier. Still, I like this.




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