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The chestnut (Free verse) by richa

Dates have become altered or places. I am drunk on absinth under the chestnut and the girl is not legal to join me. It would drive me out but I have always picked conkers on the lush grass under the chestnut and I would wager there are no men who would be happier than I under the chestnut tree with a flagon full of my favourite liquor when dates become altered or places. And the girl carrying water is not legal to join me.

zodiac 11-Jan-06/7:39 AM
The missed out repetition. It was really, um, drunk sounding that way. And I can't remember what exactly you had after "and the girl" in the first stanza, but I think it was more lyrical.




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