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Tulip (Free verse) by richa

The poor tulip boy has poor taste that he loves his patch and his trowel and spade and his landlord, the dame, that he sells to in the market his red and yellow flames. I am a poor tulip boy with not a purse nor a name made to grow tulips in clay and sleep in my shoes on a poor tulip boy wage happy, to sell none today.

richa 11-Jan-06/3:34 AM
I'm not entirely happy but it has been a while so I thought I'd put one on p/r. How about the first two lines. I meant 'that' as in 'for it is the case' as a way to explain the statement 'he has poor taste'. Does it need punctuation between l1 and l2.




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