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Flow (Free verse) by zodiac

Nights she dreams the bedroom, farmhouse, cornrows plowed straight, come unmoored. This is too good, she thinks, this straightness, this hard earth of certitude, love. There will be flood, flux, sinkage, some nadir. There will be earth-pull, that waiting ocean, Memory.

ecargo 10-Jan-06/3:09 PM
This is great. Small things: corn rows should probably be two words (otherwise it's the hairstyle, no?); is unmoored quite it?--are they drifting in this dream, undone? killer ending and a richness of imagery and sounds.




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