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the light of a truly bright day (Free verse) by digipoet

misplaced desire revealed dangerous impulse tempered arsenic attitude transmuted icy malice melted persistent night overcome

cyan9 10-Jan-06/1:21 AM
Accurate description, but the bullet like/ rapid statements dont bring you out into the bright day, a softer final sentance might add some relief e.g The persistance of night was overcome, I'm sure with nicer language you could do better than that example, but I do think the structure could be altered to massively improve this piece




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