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Sunlighting (Free verse) by ALChemy

Swallows announce the end of yesterday. The morning girl awakens to their song. Her crayola sunrise paints over the gray of fading night to dawn a bright sarong, a flower-sprinkled emerald dress that stretches to the horizon’s hem and ripples in a warm wind’s caress: A playground for the cherubim. “Oh, Uncle Moon, please play with me, while the day’s still shining bright?” “I’m so tired but I’ll try Sweetpea.” And the moon missed work that night.

ALChemy 6-Jan-06/7:21 AM
"To be or not to be: that is the question." Thank God Willy didn't listen to you. I may need a comma though, I'll give you that, or a colon after "sarong" and "caress". Punctuation isn't my strong point. What kind of sentence is "Eternal pasteless now." by the way? Oh I see it's different when you do it.

In short, of course it's not a complete sentence. So.




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