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The Forgetting (Free verse) by Dovina

He stooped to smell a rose, the same he’d smelled all morning. Inner child not inner any more, he tasted everything new— delicious oblivion. Eternal pasteless now.

zodiac 5-Jan-06/11:00 AM
I don't want to argue about it; it's just that I find that impossible to believe. Look, I can practically write your poem from article quotes:

"The Forgetting"

"you stoop to smell a rose,"
"the same rose" "that you've been stooping to smell" "all morning" ...
"delicious in oblivion"
"eternal, pastless Now"

No, "he tasted everything new" isn't in the article. But it's not grammatical either. Take credit for it if you like.

Look, I'm really, really, REALLY not looking to give you a hard time. The only reason I know about the article is that I was looking up a poem I remembered with the narrator stooping to smell a rose (Edmund Waller, maybe?) to congratulate you on referencing it. Let's let the readers decide for themselves. I'd personally like to believe you read New Yorker, The Guardian, or obscure neurology texts.




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