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light [edited] (Haiku) by lmp

yellow-pink rind fades next to morning light's luster upon your soft skin

INTRANSIT 4-Jan-06/7:24 AM
You want her skin to usurp the morning which has usurped the rind, correct? I can see it. 17 syllables is not enough some times.




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