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Construction Lot (edit) (Free verse) by zodiac

It is a dizzying sunspangled day in the city. A March-wind flirting sings in a standpipe in a lot I'm passing by where city-dwelling children used to play. Now there's a fence. And in my heart I yearn to cross that lot, and again on my return, but don’t, knowing in my heart its current kings are cold and stern. Oh, I could ask them why they've built in this, the last clear place. And they would answer Progress, such things as we learn when we are very young. And I - but I keep on my well-worn way. This wind, it flings wet trash across the lot, the city sways. And it seems if we just didn't believe these things were real before us, I could speak tongues, burn the city down, could step out and away from the ground, out into the mirror sky.

ALChemy 2-Jan-06/6:52 PM
Sunspangled? Maybe you mean sunlight spangled.
What about something like this:
It is a dizzying day in the city.
A March-wind flirting sings
in a standpipe in a lot I'm passing by
where children used to play.
Now the sun flickers behind a fence.
And in my heart I yearn to cross that lot,
and again on my return, but don’t,
knowing in my heart its current kings
are cold and stern.

I remember when I was younger and wished I could change the world and how the commonness of American complacency drove me crazy. If you wanna beat the system, buy some stock in NC construction Co.s and when you get rich buy yourself a lot for children to play in.




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