Dovina2 Jan 2006

The comma in "across the lot, the city sways" seems misplaced, as if it should be two sentences, either a period after trash, or after lot.

The dash in march-wind can go I think.

In the last verse, you start with "we" and switch jarringly to "I" as if the collective opinion affects what you believe.

The mirror makes it feel like flying away to something no better that the city with its faults. Maybe that's what you wanted, or maybe another word, not mirror. Also, "could step out and away" seems cluttered and reducible without ill effect to "step away . . ."