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Mask (Free verse) by sk8boardandpoems

Im not so happy i fake it all All i want to do is be tall. Whenever i laugh or smile Its so fake you couldn't see it a mile. They laughed and made fun of me They didn't even have the courage to look in and see My thoughts my feelings my heart My grades were bad but i knew i was smart. When te tears rolled down my face They grabbed me from behind and tied me with lace Tie her hands first they yelled Burry her with flowers because she smelled. As i listened to all of their plan They took off my mask i was a man Dont hurt him they said he's just a boy They looked me in the eye and said i was a toy. As they untied me and threw my aside How about her.......let's all decide I felt prejudice to me that very day Thats all i have nothing more to say.....

Sisterwolf 28-Dec-05/11:46 AM
Honey, I feel and share your hurt. You have a basis here for a good poem. Sometimes I cannot critique
in the proper way, so with your forgiveness, I have
written the poem another way - as a learning tool - your words are always yours.



I'm not so happy, I fake it all
All I desire is never have to crawl.
Whenever I laugh or smile,
it's fake enough to see for a mile.
They laughed and made fun of me,
without the courage to look in and see
my thoughts, my feelings, my heart.
My grades were bad, but I knew I was smart.
When tears rolled down my face,
they tied me with frayed and dirty lace.
"Tie her hands first", they yell.
Bury her in flowers so won't smell.
As I listened to all of their plan,
they took off my mask, I was a man.
"Don't hurt him, they said, he's a boy.
As they untied me and me aside,
"How about her. Let's all decide."
Prejudice came to live with me that day,
that's all that, now I nothing more to say.




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