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a cordial greeting (Free verse) by calliope

every face I see reflects a deeper sense of regret than me. more than that minor detail that skitters across each set of lips as they say hello. your poison shoots out of their pores like a blowgun and darts toward the dots in my eyes. missing the lid by an inch, and my lips always pinch and purse back that programmed reply.

INTRANSIT 28-Dec-05/8:01 AM
the poison/blowgun/darts part needs redone. I think finding another image would be better. The last line jingles, perhaps another path to try.




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