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Never Let Go Again (Free verse) by TLRufener

I don't even know Where to start So many thoughts are running Through my head I’ve only had you for a short time And today was almost the end You were faced With a pressing choice Between your life and death When fate stepped in to intervene And keep you safe from harm Sitting here quietly After you called to tell me About the car accident I can only be thankful That you are alright Tears come to my eyes As my mind planes over What could have been But then I bring myself back To the fact that you are alright It scares me that I almost lost you And I know that When I see you next I will take you into my arms And never let go again

cyan9 23-Dec-05/2:57 AM
I dont mean to cause offense, but your use of cliche to invoke deeper emotions is starting to bug me now, the poem on its own is worth more than the vote I have given it, but after having read many of your pieces I am starting to get bugged. Im sure to the person that this would have been intended, it would be very special to hear it, but to me, I have heard it all before from you, whats next????




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