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War (edit) (Free verse) by zodiac

Sensible in most things, Girlie buys foil packs of yeast whenever she shops. She has certain assumptions when it comes to – but what would you call it? – husbandry, I guess, an Order of Things: a dog, a made bed, a centerpiece, more yeast than a whole year of baking would use. And, no, it makes no difference the yeast’s alive, for it is very small. A thousand, a million lives, I’ve read, but then they are so small. So neat, so desiccant, saved for some use I can't imagine: to trip my hands, maybe, looking among stacked bins of flour, soda and sugar for, I forget just what, for something edible, then. Or say for one great final baking-day. Or say we keep our peaces, the kitchen of our love as fertile, as earth-pungent, as new graves, as a bombed field. And yet we have no bread.

LilMsLadyPoet 12-Dec-05/8:12 PM
? "as new graves, as a bombed field? I was loving this up to and after that...but I got lost there. What does that have to do with the rest? I could relate to this as one who keeps a 'food storage', well-stocked with provisions...and am driven to stock up on things I may need. This describes my large utility room full of such things, and the times when I had no bread, but I had plenty stored away, "in case". Winter rolls around and I am driven to start stock-piling. I related to the woman in this piece...but you refer to her as girlie (Girly), as if in put down. If one has ever truly gone hungry, then one probably can relate to such things and the need for self-sufficiency, and the little quirks one gains from that experience. Based on that long winded comment, think I'll give it a high score...I like the strange flow of it. For lack of better words, it just hits me good.(Except for the bit about graves and bombs, which I am still lost on...but I'm not breaking my own rule to see the comments before I vote and post!)




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