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ReplyTo a comment on Relief (Ventilation Shaft rewrite) by cyan9.

Dovina9 Dec 2005

The blacksmith metaphor starts off well, then switches to a lightning/rain metaphor. Suddenly we see a murder where little stories vent to peace (suggesting the title) and ending with a pleasant scene. Then, in the last verse, he seems to reform.

Just thought you might like to trace my thought patterns as I read it.