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Rub You Out (Free verse) by TLRufener

I wish I could rub you out Just like the words written on my hand But you have saturated me You are in my every step Hovering over me Your words are always in my mind Darkening each ray of light Your negativity has stolen my self-confidence Dampening my self-esteem Tearing down my dreams In a never-ending battle with you I can never win with you If you aren’t happy Then I can’t be happy Just when I find a chance for love You slam the door in my face

TLRufener 9-Dec-05/8:15 AM
I'm actually glad for all the criticism. The last few poems that I posted were written about three years ago, and it's nice to hear what people have to say I should change about how I write.




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