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almost missed work (Free verse) by calliope

rail; my head is softer gloomed like dimmer wheels through trainy trails. like arms about to lift before another drifts by quickly. i'm about as late to work as i have ever been, but seconds are quicker. and i clock in just as the minute hand softly swings like a defective ticker.

ALChemy 9-Dec-05/7:04 AM
Here's what I can make of this: Your head's on the tracks listening for the train, You see it in the distance. The crossing gate lifts. The train goes by. You're almost late for work. If I'm even close to right I must be psychic because this is one of the vaguest things I've read in a while. Please use capitals when needed. I don't particularly find "i" cute or sweet, just lazy. And believe me if anyone knows about lazy it's me. Some good use of rhyme placement though. "Trainy"? Would have been cuter if it was "Tranny trails".




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