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Picking Up Sins (Free verse) by BrandonW

He doesn't have a name yet, or a face that can be brought to life. But he has already rooted a stronghold in the soil of your mind. Intertwined in my sheets you nourish the existence of this phantasm. I envy him, 'cause he will pick up sins right where I left them. You will pin his pictures over empty corkboard spaces. His body will warm the side of the bed that I now occupy. He doesn't have a name yet, or a cock as big as mine. But I'm sure his exaggerated image will keep you moist. It's only the thought that he exists that keeps him alive.

ALChemy 29-Nov-05/5:35 AM
For my Penis? Normal conversation: probably "dick".
In writing: All the above but straight men will say and do the gayest things in the process of getting laid like dancing. If he was having sex in the poem and said cock that would be fine but he's just using the word like it's what he always calls it. Like "my cock itches". "I've got to go drain my cock" The more often you use it in common remarks the gayer it becomes.
Either it's that or the constant references made to "Him" in the poem followed by the use of the term "Cock" made it sound gay.
Ah hell! I don't know. It was a first impression anyway.




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