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The mountain has come to Mohammed (Free verse) by ALChemy

The mountain has come to Mohammed. The bivouac nation upturned. The dapple in the apple, a worm at it’s core. One is turned to gravel, for one dust to dust. All in the name of Bin Laden. Or so we’re led to trust. The worm, the worm, the conquering worm. His quest a chthonic pathway east to tap the subfusc river. He gaps his sewn mouth, and speaks of peace. Gives us a sense of trust. But he eats between his terms. And what he eats is dust. “Pleased to meet you”, He says. (I hope you guess his names.) Then he talks of oneiric wants, fields of verdure, fresh streams, alpenglow mountains rising from dust on twilight horizons. He prays to a new world and in him we trust. Yet those indelible souls remain while from the ramparts the worm watches. The guns and the bombs lambent until dawn when the soldiers mark notches on helmets. Day by day losing trust in who greets them with smiles. Singin’ “Another one bites the dust”. The mountain has come to Mohammed by the hand of the land of the worm. Through a prestidigitation of justice . Distracted by the constant alarm. But in the land of sand and dust. Their blindness like ours is begotten from the words in god we trust.

ALChemy 27-Nov-05/8:46 AM
Oh, by the way I just finished Local Colour. I know I’m a procrastinator but after all it is the southern way.
In some ways Bland and poemranker are alike, don’t you think? Was there a little nod to O’Henry in this one with the ironic surprise ending and the title choice? I think this is the best of the two. Certainly the most difficult to write I imagine. One of the few modern stories that I’d consider in my Rereadable category. I've only now come to realize that much of your southerness comes out in your similes and metaphors. They are always strange and colorful and way out of left field. It's a shame the public is force fed Anne Rice instead of stuff like this.




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