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The mountain has come to Mohammed (Free verse) by ALChemy

The mountain has come to Mohammed. The bivouac nation upturned. The dapple in the apple, a worm at it’s core. One is turned to gravel, for one dust to dust. All in the name of Bin Laden. Or so we’re led to trust. The worm, the worm, the conquering worm. His quest a chthonic pathway east to tap the subfusc river. He gaps his sewn mouth, and speaks of peace. Gives us a sense of trust. But he eats between his terms. And what he eats is dust. “Pleased to meet you”, He says. (I hope you guess his names.) Then he talks of oneiric wants, fields of verdure, fresh streams, alpenglow mountains rising from dust on twilight horizons. He prays to a new world and in him we trust. Yet those indelible souls remain while from the ramparts the worm watches. The guns and the bombs lambent until dawn when the soldiers mark notches on helmets. Day by day losing trust in who greets them with smiles. Singin’ “Another one bites the dust”. The mountain has come to Mohammed by the hand of the land of the worm. Through a prestidigitation of justice . Distracted by the constant alarm. But in the land of sand and dust. Their blindness like ours is begotten from the words in god we trust.

ALChemy 25-Nov-05/4:09 AM
Poe's or your's? (har-har)

You're right of course. It's too focused on one aspect right now.
I only wrote it just today and I knew I'd need to broaden it.
I just wasn't sure it was worth the bother. It all started with something you said about words you keep on your refrigerator. I did my own version of that and decided on a topic and set out to use at least a few of them in the poem. I chose the worm for these reasons: A conqueror, underground activity, biblical reference, drills into the ground, shiftyness and for the "W". The worm isn't death in this poem although he brings it. The worm is "W". I just can't think of anything yet that fits him better. Once agian I agree with you. There's not enough twists and turns in the road this poem takes. What was your interpretation of the poem's meaning? I wasn't sure if I was being too vague or not enough.




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