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phases of futility... (Free verse) by Bhaskaryya

I am to you but... Wind to the hill every touch changes course of my life and yet moves you not rain to the swan a delicate fantasy a seasoned mate but too much is never enough passing zephyr to the old oak that stirs up the leaves and after the momentary rustle loses itself within echoes of silence...

Dovina 10-Nov-05/6:42 PM
'Seasoned' as a poetic twist of 'seasonal' does not work for me because 'seasoned' has an established meaning; also it would be 'seasonaled.'

Actually, I know a woman who says she has only loved only one man, and he has never returned more than a hill returns to the wind.




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