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Posted Pelicans (Free verse) by Dovina

Comes a purple hue stealing away the day as a guitar slides in slowly stealing silence far away A pelican flaps in clumsily calks a massive beak manages its misdesign and settles on a post Shadows merely hint but never never tell of sadness sweetly coming deeply red and gold Peaks above still glisten brightly lit with snow this winter seaside Friday lapping waves below Thirteen awkward birds descended in a row each upon a post settled in what they know

zodiac 6-Nov-05/4:22 AM
Nice. Tre Cali. It's interesting that you used an ungainly creature to represent settledness. I mean that as a compliment, and see how it works, but I always think pelicans look like they're about to fall over.




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