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tobago, my tara (Free verse) by mitchski

Oh Beautiful Isle, resilient and luminescent against the world with a glowing sun raining silently, on lucid waters, saving light for mornings to follow. Oh Gallant Man, tanning on the shores of her patience looming forward lurching back pulling his inhibitions out to sea with her, slowly he rises sheltering her as she slumbers. Oh Tearful Reunion, sifting the potent earth between my fingers my toes once again falling into step meeting her once again, knowing only now a kindred, knowing only now a home, far from the one I've known on this beautiful where I lay my soul so long ago.

anonymous 10-May-02/11:02 AM
Oh Bad Poetry,
painful and dying on the monitor

This is actually better than the first one I read. You seem to know that poetry has something to do with nouns and verbs, and that's something learned.

The language is a little too "poetic" for me. You know how "descriptive" the writing is on the sides of cereal boxes? Any time you read the side of a cereal box, I guarantee you can tell the writing is phony. Something just doesn't feel right, because the adjectives are placed there with a dishonest intent.




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