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There is a journey tree (Free verse) by ALChemy

There is a journey tree that stands amidst a river at the brink of a waterfalls that ends in a sea of fire It is the last resort for those caught by the stream Despite the rivers rage its strength will never wane Two birds around it circle One pigeon and one dove and as they pass each other the birds exchange a feather Its leaves are crystalline their colors ever changing and forever it shall stand for what it stands for is forever

ALChemy 25-Oct-05/4:31 AM
Thanks LadyPoet

The bird thing was kinda an experiment. It in one way criticizes the pre-concieved religious symbolism of the tree and in that way contradicts it. I thought it would be appropriate to have the bird line interupt the poem but I conceed it does throw the reader off a bit.
I looked up booth brink and amidst and there doesn't seem to be a problem. Brink: The upper edge of a steep or vertical slope. The verge.
Amidst:(or Amid) Surrounded by; in the middle of.
I must be missing something obvious I guess.

Good suggestions.
I hope there's a tree too. Lord knows I'll probably need it.
Sorry about the punctuation I must have had something against periods that day.




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