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Rocky Road (Free verse) by Dovina

Westward pavement, rubberized asphalt made from big-rig tires. Newer versions roll thereon taking others to be ground. Now the tires, old and new, throb with pound of trailer, the last of eighteen wheels to pass a place of sweet remembrance. Driver drowsy drifts to shoulder, wakes in time to whip it back. Trailer wags a whimsic wander, out to gravel shoulder drifts. The rightmost tire grabs a rock in crevice of its tread; Lifts it, slings it, Upward, backward With cracking speed to glass. Flaps outstretched like waving hands wish that rock goodbye. The driver blinks and straightens, vows to stay awake, recalls a special deal he got one snowy day in Denver— fancy flaps with woman nude, tits up and facing back.

Dovina 12-Oct-05/7:18 AM
You’re right about the rogue “as” in the last. I was tired last night writing it. You know how a poem stews all day while you’re driving. See edit. Then kindly replace your vote.

The first flaps line has them waving goodbye to the rock. The second is the driver’s recollection of buying them and refers back to line 4. Same with the drowsy driver lines. The first has him drowsing, the second has him recovering.




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