balthazar4 Sep 2002

not sure if this isn't a little overblown. i think for the style, the revelations within aren't revealing enough. it doesn't seem to illuminate any hidden truth, only couches it in stilted language. and this: "We were royally screwed indeed," seems really out of place in here. strange inclusion. it's better than any poetry i could write, but i think it could say more, and simpler.