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Dale (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

What times we had ! You taught me darts and the first time I played my dad I beat him. I worry about my dads age sometimes it seems like a joke now. We bowled ! game after game after game then billiards with Dave. I'm sure who we worked for was a contributor. Doing our laundry together, god how we grew when you said "fuck you" I knew what you meant. And we could move cars! The whole Marijuana and Valerie thing was just too funny! Now I'm a newborn pup that just lost its mother. I just want to punch a grandfather clock! Grab its arms, yank its guts out through its face. I could have come to Arkansas and helped you with that thing you had going on, whatever it was. I would have, gladly. But I didn't know you never called me again. What's left but Sade and Courvosier white russians.

Caducus 15-Sep-05/9:00 AM
its a freakin classic and normally what i liked a couple of years ago isnt the same now (which can be said of some readers to my work). This is still so haunting and ripping out the guts of a grandfather clock shows your emotive qualities spilling over - this poem made me like you as a human and writer.




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