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First Love (Free verse) by Dovina

The brilliant sunrise Of this winter morning Turned to bright reality of day. I wasn’t winter-broken, I thought it would stay.

zodiac 10-Sep-05/4:33 AM
Oops. I meant, yes I do see the point. The part about sunrises is, as far as I see it, the point of the poem. To recap:

Woman wakes, sees sunrise, thinks it'll stay, it doesn't, because she's silly. The fault isn't the sunrise's, nor even necessarily the human condition's, it's just the woman's. Are we agreed to this point? Okay, yes, I think it's not only trite, but a little dumb. I also think whatever you imagine you've learned, you still blame the sunrise.




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