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First Love (Free verse) by Dovina

The brilliant sunrise Of this winter morning Turned to bright reality of day. I wasn’t winter-broken, I thought it would stay.

INTRANSIT 3-Sep-05/6:46 AM
Ultimately I would say that rhythm is not more important. I DO think the first 3 lines set up a nice beat and I thought follow through would be good. Hmmm. Maybe l-4 is okay. one more beat in 5?




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