poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on First Love by Dovina.

Dovina3 Sep 2005

Is your point that "I wasn’t winter-broken, though, I thought that it would stay." has a better beat than "I wasn’t winter-broken, I thought it would stay."? Do you really mean that four beats is better than three? The prior lines don't carry a steady number of beats, why should the last two? Is rhythm really more important?