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First Love (Free verse) by Dovina

The brilliant sunrise Of this winter morning Turned to bright reality of day. I wasn’t winter-broken, I thought it would stay.

Dovina 3-Sep-05/6:41 AM
Is your point that "I wasn’t winter-broken, though, I thought that it would stay." has a better beat than "I wasn’t winter-broken, I thought it would stay."? Do you really mean that four beats is better than three? The prior lines don't carry a steady number of beats, why should the last two? Is rhythm really more important?




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