impert&ent29 Aug 2005

Well conceived, I like the line of thought.
Each stanza presemnts a clear idea in the development of an overall insight.

The phrasing feels a bit awkward, but it may just be the number of syllables and the structure of a sonnet. The only thing I can see to change is the 'they' and Theirs' in 2nd and 3rd stanzas. There is a hint of subject/object disagreement that could be clarified.