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How Angels Sleep (Free verse) by Dovina

They roll and turn with minds confused to understand their earthly charge Angels have no pain or joy from which to learn the art of comfort. They know so very little how a woman feels with wounded knee or poison word. About an earthly hand below her rib— once a pleasure, now a scar— about this feeling, only theories can they bring. And for the missing manly snuggles, they tout prescriptions learned, obeying Teacher’s word, then listen while she grumbles. All their efforts leave her sobbing beside him on the bed, bewildered, while their platitudes roll on. But once an angel felt it briefly— the way to reach his charge’s heart. He lay beside her sleeping soundly, and she knew he understood.

Dovina 23-Aug-05/7:28 AM
re “nor”: I see your point about the wording and agree that yours is clearer. But I want to stress that she has an emotion (feeling) concerning the hand below her rib, not just a physical feeling. The angel might understand the physical feeling, but not the emotion.

The poem is whimsical and non-doctrinal, as we have both said. So why are you bring the Bible into it?

The last verse is a metaphor for a man, and the whole poem could be interpreted that way. Since I’ve used the plural, angels, throughout the poem, it seems fair to say in the last verse that one particular angel (or man) is different from the others. Therefore the man/angel has not changed his nature. Maybe I could make that more clear.

Thanks for your comments.




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