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Surveyor and Farmer (Free verse) by Dovina

He hikes all day in hardwoods, transit on his shoulder, steel tape dragging long. I trudge alone in corn, sack upon my hip, plucking ears like days before. His weariness from thinking, packing, sweat, mine from picking, shooking, heat. Eyes closed, half asleep. Small squeeze, a swell. Four eyelids open, four lip corners rise. Til next time, sleep well.

Dovina 20-Aug-05/11:22 AM
An adjective phrase is any phrase which modifies a noun or pronoun. So you must mean lines 2,3,5,and 6. You have objected to my using lines like these in the past, and I've never understood why. It's become a part of my style and hard to change one's sex, but not impossible. I will change if convinced it's bad in some way besides preference. Really, thanks for the comment and vote.




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