poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on The Giant Verse by drnick.

ALChemy19 Aug 2005

Loose "Beside a path of broken darts". It just sounds goofy. You have an engine that has some good parts but you need to assemble it better. Get your thoughts to connect with each other. Then rev that engine up.

Last line should be "Rather HAVE left before he stayed."