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Black Heart (Free verse) by brazen

Spring is the Season for love to bloom, And rescue the blackest heart from the deepest tomb. Now rotting away in a shadowy abyss, Was a faceless man waiting to be awoken by a kiss, When an Angel with a kiss like fire, Finally did appease the man's desire, And now the light which had eluded his soul, Began to fill him and make him whole. Like him her face was bare, But her eyes stood out with their erotic stare, Her hair loose and wild when the breeze had blown, Just as if it had a mind of its' own, Her body language permeated a senual feeling, Making her all the more appealing, But even the tantalizing appeal of her flesh, Will never equal the sexiness of a mind without rest, Her skin as soft as a satin sheet, Sweating hips pleaded to repeat, Her hands he could hold for hours on end, That sweet smile and flavorful lips a perfect blend. But alas their timing was far off the chart, For this Angel was mending a broken heart, So leaving for Heaven she said goodbye, And gave one last hug before flying off to the sky, So with a single tear rolling down his disappearing face, He turned to hear a voice vibrating out of space, It was Despair and again it was calling him back, To the lonely and dank prison of a reborn heart of black.

brazen 3-Sep-02/10:14 AM
let me explain myself better, after i apologize for apparently coming off egotistical, but i do not find myself up on a higher plain than anyone else...lets compare...if i was a painter and i messed up a stroke, i wouldn't start a new painting from scratch, i'd just go with it and see what comes out...thats the way i write. when i put too much thought into things they get messed up, so i write and just let whatever comes out...as i've stated, this was the FIRST poem i ever tried to right, and i'm actually not too fond of it, but i really don't like to go back and fix it because of the emotion it portrays to me, as if i was pretending to be happy when i was sad...i have no idea if any of this made sense, but this is the long, more detailed explanation of my thoughts. now, we continue our tour...




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